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life has a way of pissing on
our sugar coated dreams,
and once its gained it isn't
worth a dime, 
or any other currency.
its those little things that
keep us lingering on for the
next.
another coffee. another tea.
another cigarette. a movie.
a jacket potato.
safe and warm curled up under
a duvet.
its all the small things and
everything else.

waiting for the next cigarette,
the next wank, the next 
game show.
the next moment of connection 
where it seems like more than 
that.
finding it for a second 
then it fleeting and falling 
back to the next.

its like that moment after you
cum and there's a clarity and
tremendous nothingness

as you walk in and out of 
sensations holding the cup that's 
never full.
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014  Student Writer
i don't even have words for this. it's so relatable. it's like a thought that everyone has but you have put down onto paper. nice job. 
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vincentludwig Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014
Thank you so much. Im glad you think it has some truth to it :hug:
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solis-ortus Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2014  Student Writer
you're welcome :heart:
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ersatzteilh Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student Photographer
AH, this piece was amazing. I can't choose my favourite verse, but I would say ...

 the next moment of connection 
where it seems like more than 
that.  

I got the feeling that you are improving everytime you post a poem. Did you get the inspiration from something in particular?
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vincentludwig Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
Awww thank you. Im glad you like it. As far as the inspiration goes it was just the general day to day boredom of life. I wrote this one a while ago :)
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ersatzteilh Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student Photographer
keep the good work :) 
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noirbloome Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2014
I liked the last line the most... We are a very unsatisfied bunch of animals, us humans, always waiting for the next high that unless we work at it or God grants us a miracle, we'll never have. Very much mirroring a drug user if you think about it :)
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vincentludwig Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
We are. Even the animals are more satisfied than us. They're always in the present moment whereas were always in the past or the future dissatisfied and looking for our next high. Im glad you liked it and picked up on the comparison to a drug :hug:
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noirbloome Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
I think its insightful and it has meaning, hence why i like it....and I can't write poetry myself to save my life therefore I may as well critique and enjoy reading another atrists work and give myself a break from decoding Shakespeare's bipolar moods and love affairs... xx
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vincentludwig Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
haha decoding shakespeare's bipolar moods sounds fun, you'll have to see if you can decode some of mine sometime :P
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